Monday, January 2, 2012

Frankie's Third Annual No Kiss Blogfest

This year my entry to Frankie's No Kiss Blogfest is an excerpt from the prologue of my newest work-in-process, Blessed Are The Peace Makers.
"The mail creaked and Awen grunted as she drew it from the prince's broad chest and arms. Shoving it aside, she summoned all her strength to drag him from the water. From the depths of slumber, William cried out. Awen probed his chest and shoulder for wounds, then wrapped her arms behind him to inspect his back. Her ear rested over his heart, listening for the beat of life. It was faint, but present.
The wounds had closed, save those that kept him from waking. She leaned in to confirm that he was breathing, and felt a light stirring on her cheek. It was present. She turned her face back and her lips barely grazed his.
Steel eyes flew open, startling her. Recovering, Awen’s face blossomed in welcome.
Attribution
The eyes flickered, staring without seeing, then just as abruptly closed. His body was waking but his spirit still wandered.
Awen touched her lips to his cold, white ones. The eyes fluttered. She put her hands on both sides of the handsome face and slowly kissed him in the way of the druid. Forehead, nose, chin, cheeks. Then his eyelids and his temples. Finally, her lips came back to his. This time they were warm, and breath tumbled out of them like the water from the rocks.
Awen waited, her face only inches from the fallen warrior’s.
His eyes fluttered open. Sight was returning. He almost focused, then fell back under, the death sleep unrelenting.
Awen sat back on her heels and looked in to the forest. The glade had darkened. The light was waning. It was time to set a fire and a kettle. But first she must wake the almost dead."
Please leave a comment to let me know what you think of my little snippet. I'm counting on the Blogfest to inspire me onward. It's time to get onward with the business of writing, past time to get this story down for others to read. Oh yeah, and don't forget to click over now to read the other entries.

13 comments:

Michelle Gregory said...

yes. you have to finish this.

Amalia T. said...

I like the idea of the "kiss in the way of the druid" as if it has some magic power of its own.

Larissa said...

I loved the kiss in the way of the druid! Nicely done!

Tricia J. O'Brien said...

'his spirit still wandered' is wonderful imagery, as is the druid kiss. Thanks for putting this up.

Frankie Diane Mallis said...

That's so romantic and sweet and I love the druid kiss! Thanks for participating:-)

ralfast said...

I'm getting a whole lot of Nightingale meets Sleeping Beauty kind of vibe from this. Laughter may be the best medicine, but some kisses apparently can wake the dead. ;)

Donna Hole said...

Nice set up Olivia. Loved that she was rescuing him. I have a soft spot for Druids :)

.......dhole

portrayaloftichwi said...

This had a magical feel to it. I can picture fireflies glowing around them as she wakes him from near death.

Christine Danek said...

I think you need to continue. I'm interested. :) Good luck!

Sarah Ahiers (Falen) said...

ooh, i particularly liked the kissing in the way of the druids. That was a wonderful detail and image

1000th.monkey said...

Yup, the *druid kiss* line was interesting.

Though, if he cried out in the depths of slumber (in the first para), then isn't it obvious he was alive? Why then does she need to check his breathing/etc?

Olivia J. Herrell said...

You guys rock! Thanks for stopping by and for commenting. I'll be making the rounds all week this week, so far I've read lots of great No Kiss scenes, looking forward to reading yours!

~ Olivia

Olivia J. Herrell said...

1000th Monkey, great catch! I totally missed that.

Thanks so much, Olivia

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