Just a quick check-in with a little Monday madness: a snippet from the Peace Makers chapter I'm working on. This one is written from the POV (point of view) of one of the main characters, a fourteen year-old boy named Brian.
"Within nanoseconds, the fissure trembled and ruptured, ripping the gorilla enclosure and the path in two. The facing side settled and sank, belching dust and sand in to the air to shower down on them. Gorillas, trees and rubble tumbled away along the face of the emerging slope.
But it didn't stop there. The side where they crouched rose rapidly in to the air like an elevator. It was the oddest sensation standing atop a rising mountain, thrilling yet totally terrifying."Who lives, who dies? Only the characters know.
And they're not telling.
~ Olivia J. Herrell
5 comments:
Awesome!!!
No, not the gorillas!! Won't someone please think of the gorillas?
Wow! I've never read anything like that... to stand atop a rising mountain!
Give my stomach butterflies.
Okay, I'm convinced. You're a real writer. I look forward to reading more.
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